Published May 24, 2008
(Chorus)
Lies, all lies,
Everything in this world
Is a lie.
Lies, all lies,
From the day that we are born
'Till the day that we die,
Verse 1
You can paint it black,
And you can paint it white
You can paint it in,
Whatever colour you like.
But it's still a lie,
And you/are lie-ing to me.
Lies on lies on lies (etc. repeated)
Life/ it is a lie.
Verse 2
Because I/ am not worthy
Of the truth/ am I?
Because I/cannot handle
The truth- right?
Verse 3
Because I/ am not worthy,
I can't handle/ the truth
Because I/ like being lied to...
Yeah Right!
(Chorus)
(Verse 3)
Verse 4
Okay, you say,
You'll tell me the truth
But guess what? I
Don't wanna hear it,
Please don't do it/again
Please don't do it/again
Please don't do it/again
Please don't tell me the truth again
Please don't tell me the truth again
Please don't tell me the truth again
'Cos I can't
handle the truth again
'Cos I can't
handle the truth again
'Cos I can't
handle the truth again
'Cos I can't 'cos I can't 'cos I cant 'cos I cant;
Handle/the/truth
Again.
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yeh the / is meant for a pause, you see on some lyrics when they are written down.
Hi! I noticed there weren't any crits yet so I decided to give it a try.
I didn't feel this was powerful enough to be the opening part.
I liked this. But unfortunately the length of the last line kind of breaks the nice flow of the verse.
OK. What?? What's with the slash? And just to let you know, it's "lying".
The slashes disturbed me so much I couldn't focus on the words. Again, the last line breaks the flow.
This was pretty vague, but I still liked it.
The lining is not good. Move the "I" to the second line.
The fourth verse is funnily long compared to the other ones. And since the title is "All Lies", maybe the last verse could be more collecting?
Well, I hope I was of any help. Just keep up your work and good luck!
Demeter xx